Sometimes we hold in this wild animal inside. the itch just to lash out, the itch to just hurt the people. The people that hurt us back. People who are set free, saved by these unfair laws. The LAW. No. They don’t know anything. The PAIN i go through, the things i SACRIFICED, and most importantly…that one person i loved SO much. So much, i would do the most malicious thing…this boiled and uncontrollable feeling. I love it. And when I find that person…the things i would do if i grasp just a inch of that person. I would let them go. but not in this world. A world where people are so fragile…so different. These sick, and horrible beings deserve soemthing more than being set free, or being shoved into a empty and cold room. They deserve to be prey…to be hunted down and violently ripped apart. They aren’t no predators…They are my prey.
Revenge Is Best Served Cold is a gore and R rated game. If you are sensitive to this topic please don’t follow, as horror will take place. There is no summary, and no spoilors. Read the documents…they come in everyday. Read.Read.Read.
Small Writing tip, police reports aren’t really as flavorful as this. This one is written much more like a news article, than a police report. Police reports are usually a lot more factual and straight to the point without much flavor.
Additionally, why bridge of [REDACTED] in quotation marks? And why is it necessary to redact the name of a bridge? And why is it necessary to describe the appearance of a witness? And why is the witness feeling remorse for something he didn’t do himself? Unless of course the man with purplish-black hair was meant to be the perpetrator of the crime.
It’s such a funny word to use. I’d understand if it was like “feeling like my blood is boiling” or something, but just straight up boiled makes me imagine a hard-boiled egg.
All of the censored and redacted quotes I think are necessary since it gives us a sense of mysteriousness since we don’t know the entire situation, and all the redacted parts of it show that the case was meant to be classified. This is necessary if it is meant to be a case to solve on our own, and there’ve been lots of praises for this in the past. For a police report, it’s necessary to give out a description of the perpetrator, and witnesses are sometimes subject to being a suspect (hence their description). While it’s true it doesn’t exactly feel like a police report, it’s meant to serve as a document.
The name is off. The proper phrasing is “Revenge is a dish best served cold”, and there’s no harm in abbreviating with something like RIADBSC, and I’m unsure why this wasn’t picked as the name.
There are various grammatical errors. It’s nitpicky, but for a game that seems to have reliance on it, it needs to be improved.
The “gore and R rating” thing will need to be actually seen and done first before calling it R rated. Literally my whole niche is a ridiculously gory game… and it’s like T-rated.
I don’t understand the point of some of the newspaper redactions. It just seems like stuff was blotted out impulsively instead of intentionally.
I’m skeptical about this whole idea, so I’d like to see some actual content first.
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I also notice several attempts to come off ‘dark’ and ‘edgy’ and ‘mysterious’ in the presentation of this game. I’ll be honest, with how much concentration of that vibe there is across the board, you sound a little silly, man. You might want to rewrite this all. Generally my rule of thumb is to only give potential players the information they need, and be concise as possible. Don’t try to set a tone for presenting new games. We have no idea what to expect, so trying to shoestring together an ‘edgy’ announcement of a game is more than likely going to turn heads away, because the whole post comes off like “trust me bro, this is the stuff” instead of “this is my new thing, check it out!”
Overall, and as bluntly as possible, it’s hard to have confidence in this.
